A
frigid chill revealed the man’s breath as he hoisted himself out of his sedan.
Closing the distance between himself and the glass doors before him, the wind
swept between the cluster of brick buildings. Blinding light from the
streetlights above caused him to blink as he slid his phone out of his pocket
to contact his delivery customer. He bitterly shook his head in anticipation of
the meager tip he was certain he would soon receive. After hanging up the phone
he swung open the frosty glass door and took refuge in the toasty hallway.
The
man could not help but be reminded of a hospital hallway despite the scattered
beer cans and dirty floors. There was an eerie, clinical buzz about the room
that made him slightly uncomfortable. Stifling down a yawn as he shifted his
weight from one foot to the other, his arm began to go numb as he held the
greasy pizza and sandwiches.
Stumbling by in heels and mini skirts, a group of loud, drunken girls
passed through the hallway practically unable to stand. Shaking his head the man impatiently
checked the gleaming, silver watch on his left wrist.
Squinting
out the chilly windows he spotted a group of men sauntering through the parking
lot. Giving them little thought he sighed and twisted his gaze to the windows
opposite him. A gust of icy air whooshed around him making him shiver despite
his think, layered clothing. Similar
to the rush of air that just passed by him, a sweeping blow to his right side
caused him to plummet to the ground in a crumpled heap.
http://www.collegian.psu.edu/archive/2012/01/17/delivery_driver_attacked_.aspx
I really love the sensory details of this scene and how they evoke a sense of danger to come. This is the perfect "scene" because it isolates a brief moment and extends it. Well done!
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